They always strike in the middle of the night, don't they? ;)
Like I said before, I love the contrasts, and you nailed it with the last 2 sentences! (And it's Bella to me. :D)
Yes, they do. I woke up with ideas just dying to escape my brain.
Thanks, love. I am really enjoying these. I'm trying to read and give feedback to everyone who posts, as well.
psst, I thought of you, and of Bella when I wrote this...
Aw, this is soooo good Shonna! I love how you never tell us who the woman is! ♥
Thanks love. I like not telling you. *grin*
Up to you.
That was very beautiful. In my mind, poetry. Thanks for writing it.
Gods, what a wonderful thing to say. *hugs*
No. Thank you for reading it.
You're very welcome. And I meant what I wrote above, it really did feel like a poem. Lovely.
Gentle caresses become heated explorations. Lust abounds. The need for one another is still brazenly unrestrained. Long dark fingers ghost over pale silken skin.
You have a style that I would love to see in longer peice of fiction- if and when you get round to it. I can't wait to see more, Shonna. I can't believe it's taken you think long to share your talent.
Errr- this long to share your talent. Not think long. :(
I knew what you meant, love *grin*
*blushes profusely, again.
You like my style! *dies* You think I'm talented?!? *dies again* I'm going to love you until the end of time. ♥ I mean it.
Posting fics scares me! I never think they are very good. Even these 100 word drabbles. I know I am silly or whatever, particularly since y'all are my friends and would never be mean to me...but it's just hard for me. I am getting there. Three posts. That's good.
I have loads of ideas for longer fics. Maybe I'll move on to a ficlet or something soon. I'm just getting comfortable with the idea of posting these drabbles. And I've pimped myself on my own journal. I was scared to do that. I'm such a dork, I know.
Anyway, I appreciate you so much! *hugs*
Conflicting faith. The younger has none to speak of. The elder wants to forget what the word means.
That was it for me, that line.
I felt you weren't explaining quite, and going for eloquent language and snappy sentaces over a depth of plot, but that gave me the insight I needed, about what you were trying to achieve.
Some great contrasts, there, especially the last too lines.
I must ask? What pace were you going for, because normally short sentances seperated like that is snappy and fast, but somehow... this wasn't at all.
It took me forever to write this. I had so many ideas. The drabble was intended to be poetic, really. Sort of the likes of a beautiful escape. I wanted you to feel the depth of need for each of these people. Their senses in reality are on overload, so they use one another to escape that. Needing and feeling only those specific sensations that they require of one another.
Yes, I was digging for the contrasts. I wanted you to see that these people are quite different. Yet, they need the same thing.
Pace: you are right on target. I know that usually short sentences are meant to be read in a staccato fashion. This was meant to be read as a sort of roll over your tongue, dies out at the end, sort of whisper. I hope I achieved that, at least somewhat.
So, did you like it? *grin*
Thanks for the feedback!
You achieved all- and yes, I did enjpy it very much *hugs*
And another wonderful drabble.
And now tell me who the mysterious woman is... PLEASE! XD
Hee! Thanks! ♥
Don't you have any guesses?
I dunno... Narcissa maybe? Or Bella? *ponders*
The last two lines say it all. Awesome.
Thank you so much. Your thoughts are appreciated. I squee anytime I see that someone has even given a moment to read something of mine.
I really need to catch up on my reading and let others know how much I appreciate their writing as well. :D